Zine: The First Page

So I've been working on the first page of my zine for a few days now and boy is it giving me a headache. It needs to really pop and draw people in as soon as they see it and my designs just aren't doing that.

Here is the page layout with quick alterations to give myself an idea of how it will look

Here is one of test ideas for the page. I think I need to lock down what style I'm going to use to illustrate before I push any further with it.

My girlfriend suggested I take a step back and leave it alone for a while. I'm going to heed her advice and leave it. I may work on some later pages first or work on character designs some more...